【教师解析】2014年10月25日雅思写作解析及范文

写作：今天的小作文是继9月20日之后再一次考到地图，题目是描述一个community centre十年后房间格局的变化。上课时有仔细听老师讲解过相同类型题目写法的同学，肯定能够游刃有余地应对今天的考题。同类图如下：The diagrams below are existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery.

  
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 　　首先要注意的是时态问题，如描述上面第一张图时应该是一般现在时，而第二张图则应该用将来时。今天的考题“十年后”若是一种设想的状况，也应该用将来时，但更有可能的是一般现在时或过去时，需要同学们在审题时有个清晰的判断。另外，在概述的时候可以先总体说一下在房间格局上有很大的变化，然后再把最突出的变化点一下即可。以下是上图中涉及到的一些表达，相信也可以用到今天的考题中去：

1. the layout of
　　...的布局
　　2. significant changes will be made in terms of the use of floor space
　　在空间使用上将会发生显著的变化
　　3. There will be a completely new...and more space...
　　将会有一个全新的...以及更多...的空间
　　4. enter...through doors which lead into...
　　从通向...的门进入...
　　5. walk straight into...
　　直接走进...里面
　　6. In place of..., the new plan shows...
　　在...的位置，新的计划显示了...
　　7. ...will be about twice as large as it is now
　　  ...将会是现在的两倍大小
　　8. occupy the area that is now used for...
　　占据现在用来做...的区域

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而今天的大作文就实在是太简单了，工作类的题本身就不至于无话可说，而且还是2011年11月19日的原题重现，一定会有同学准备过这个题目，如下：

Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others think that people cannot always expect to enjoy a job and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.（一些人认为工作满足感比工作稳定性更重要，而另一些人认为人们不能总是期望享受工作，一份稳定的工作才是更重要的。讨论双方观点并给出自己的观点。）

如果要说唯一难的地方，恐怕就是题目中的几个词会有同学不认识或拿捏不准意思。job security（工作稳定性）不是“工作保卫”，而permanent是temporary（暂时的）的反义词，属于高频常用词汇。这题的问法是“讨论+观点”，那么在文章开头就应该清晰地亮出自己的观点，例如：“承认工作稳定性很重要，但工作满足感同样不可忽视”。之后在两个主体段分别讨论“稳定性”和“满足感”的重要性即可。以下一些观点思路/表达方式供同学们参考：

1. choose jobs based on...
　　基于...选择工作
　　2. ...is the key consideration when deciding on a career
　　  ...是决定职业道路时的关键考量
　　3. ...are equally important
  　　...是同等重要的
　　4. ...is necessary in order for people to meet their basic needs
　　  ...是必要的为了使人们能够满足基本需求
　　5. need money to pay for housing, food, bills, health care, and education
　　需要钱来支付房子、食物、账单、医疗和教育的开销
　　6. consider it a priority to cover these needs and have a reasonable quality of life
　　把满足这些需求和拥有一个基本有保障的生活看作首要任务
　　7. difficult to support themselves
　　难以养活他们自己
　　8. have a good pension and health insurance
　　有丰厚的养老金和医疗保险
　　9. salaries gradually increase
　　薪水会逐渐增加
　　10. may be promoted within the organization
　　可能会在企业中得到提拔
　　11. experienced staff can be trusted with more responsibility
　　有经验的员工被信任去承担更多的责任
　　12. to achieve a balance between work time and leisure or family time
　　实现在工作和休闲及家庭之间的平衡
　　13. too much work can result in stress and poor health
　　太多工作会造成压力和不健康
　　14. a good work/ life balance can raise job satisfaction
　　良好的工作/生活的平衡能提高工作满足感
　　15. happy, healthy workers are more productive
　　快乐健康的工作者们更有生产力
　　16. personal relationships and the atmosphere in a workplace
　　人际关系和工作氛围
　　17. make a huge difference to workers’ levels of happiness and general quality of life
　　极大改善员工的幸福感水平和生活的基本质量
　　18. professional achievements
　　事业成就
　　19. contribute something positive to society
　　对社会做出一些积极的贡献

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　　Word count: 164
　　范文
　　The diagrams illustrate the changes in the communitycenter before and after the decoration.

It is noticeable that the whole area for indoor activity has been expanded over the 10-year period. The most significant changeis that the initial garden was replaced by inner sports.

Inhabitants can enter the reception through a door as before. In the center of the community center, there is a hall which can accommodate 100 people at the sametime, and this is also the same as before. However, the large storage room northto the hall, has been divided into two parts today, namely, a smallerstorage and toilets.

The coffee bar is no longer a part of the community center. Instead, an office equipped with toilets has taken itsplace. Also, four offices in the northeast corner and the storage opposite tothe kitchen disappeared. A newly-built café area occupies thisarea and is open to all visitors currently. Finally, the kitchen and parking lot are still in use. 

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　　Task 2
　　题目类别：工作 　提问方式：Discussion
　　考试题目：
　　Some people believe that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe that people cannot always enjoy their jobs and that a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

　　范文1
　　word count：335
　　It is true that seeking for a decent job is not as easy asdecades ago due to the economic recessionand competitive job market. Althoughsome may argue that a sense ofsatisfaction towards their jobs is crucial, personally, I believe that apermanent job is more meaningful.

On the one hand, a permanent job can guarantee to meetemployee’s basic needs. This is because almost no one can escape from thereality. Everyday, we are facing with a variety of expenses, such as food, shelter, transport, bill and even education tuition for children. With arelatively stable job, people, especially those in middle aged can cover most expenses. In addition, thosewho stay in the same company or institute aremore likely to get a promotion as they show the loyalty towards theircompany. However, those who change their jobs frequently may have unintended outcomes. For example, they may find difficult to support themselves and raise their family members.

On the other hand, those advocates for pursuing a job theylove might regard job satisfaction as the priority when finding an employment.They believe only working with friendly colleagues and employers and under aflexible working time schedule, can they fulfill their potential and accomplish all tasks well. However, this idea is unrealistic. For example, dozens of young graduates in all parts of the world have thebitter result because of their immature thought, that is unemployment.

In my opinion, there isno perfect job in the world. The only thing we can do is to find a suitable jobrather than a perfect one. There is a 10,000 hours theory in psychology that peoplewho devote themselves to jobs and spend more than 10,000 hours constantly can become experts in thatfield. This theory tells us a plain fact that no one can achieve a sense of job satisfaction without years of effortsand persistence.

In conclusion, people having a constant job are more likely to have a promising career and wellbeing.

范文2
　　word count：268
　　A job can provide people with various things including pay, perks, and reputation. But if one thinks about the significance or at very least the purpose of doing the job, he/she must really consider the relative importance between job satisfaction and job stability.

Some believe that the sense of satisfaction outweighs that of security in the workplace. The reason is that if people are satisfied with their job, they will naturally have more zest for what they do, and this can in turn motivate them to achieve better job performance. By comparison, although a high level of job security suggests that people can keep their jobs, those who value it more would have less incentive to work hard, and thus be less likely to reach comparable achievements.

However, I personally would agree with the view that jobs are not always enjoyable and a constant career bear more importance. For instance, if a product manager wants to succeed, he/she will have to study the varying preferences of consumers before launching any potentially popular product. A more convincing example is the scientists who identified the cycle of sunspot. He spent his entire life in an observatory tracking and recording the astronomical data. None of these works are pleasant things to do, but without such continuous painstaking workin an occupation, people will be unable to taste the thrill of success, and can even end up leading a fruitless life.

In conclusion, my own view is that job satisfaction is moreimportant than job security, but to accomplish any meaningful goals, one must go through the repetition of endless boring works.

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