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2015年4月25日雅思写作解析及相关参考

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2015年4月25日雅思写作解析及相关参考

雅思写作机经

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  Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same way as adults by authorities,to what extent do you agree or disagree? 少年犯应该和成年犯罪者受到相同的处罚,是否认同? 
 
 
  相关提问: 
 
  Research suggests that majority of criminals who send to prison would commit crimes when set free, what do you think of this case? What can be done to solve this problem? 研究显示,大部分的犯罪分子释放以后会再次犯罪,你认为原因何在,如何解决? 
 
 
  Sending criminals to prison is not the effective method to deal with them. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 将犯罪分子送进监狱不是有效的方式解决犯罪,我们应该给他们提供接受教育和工作培训的机会,是否认同? 
 
 
  Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion 有人认为,每一种犯罪都应该有固定刑罚,有人认为,在量刑的时候,个人犯罪的环境和动机应该被考虑,讨论两种观点,谈及你的观点。 
 
  雅思写作: 
 
  1. 词汇替换:题目中关键重要词汇的替换表达;可以选择同义词、近义词或者短语替换 
 
  2. 主题观点:明确作家立场、写作目的及所持态度 
 
  3. 思路拓展:支持、反驳或者解释、解决的理由 
 
  4. 正文写作:个性开篇;高分句型;正文内容丰富 
 
  5. 仔细检查:仔细检查逻辑、词汇、语法 
 
  提问解析:是否同意一种观点推荐让步反驳写法:三方让步原题观点的合理性,七分反驳原题观点的不合理性。 
 
  作家立场:少年犯不应该和成年犯受到完全相同的处罚,尽管少年犯也应该为自己的行为负责。 
 
  写作构思: 
 
  首段:背景介绍 + 有待反驳的观点 + 作家立场 
 
  二段:让步观点的合理性:最多两点,可以例证 
 
  三段:反驳观点的不合理:三点反驳,细节展开 
 
  尾段:再次亮明观点 + (总结理由) 
 
  例文参考: 
 
  首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场 
 
  令人担忧的是,在很多国家, 青少年犯罪率居高不下,成为困扰很多父母以及危及社会的一个严重的社会问题,很多专家已对如何改造青少年犯提出了很多的策略,一种观点认为:青少年犯罪应该和成年犯罪受到相同的处罚。然而我认为:少年犯不应该和成年犯受到完全相同的处罚,尽管处罚少年犯也应该为自己的行为负责。 
 
  二段:让步段:少年犯和成年犯应该受到相同处罚的理由 
 
  我承认,对于青少年犯罪给予和成年犯罪者一样的处罚在改造少年犯方面有一定的积极作用。第一,这体现了法律的公正,可以想象,任何犯罪行为必然对受害者造成严重的身心伤害,因此,所有犯罪者,无论是少年犯,还是成年犯罪者,理应为自己的行为负责。第二,这样的处罚策略对于受害者以及家属来说是一种精神安慰,同时,这对于潜在的少年犯罪者有一定的心理威慑作用。 
 
  三段:反驳段:为何少年犯不应该和成年犯受到相同的处罚 
 
  然而,我想要反驳的是:青少年犯罪和成年犯罪是有区别的,简单认为两者的处罚力度应该完全相同是肤浅的。第一,对于一些青少年犯而言,他们误入迷途可能是因为过失犯罪,或者是冲动犯罪,还有可能是被诱导犯罪,因此,教育是有效的策略之一,因为教育可以帮助他们反思人生,明辨是非,增强守法意识。第二,对于一些少年犯而言,出狱后可能缺乏谋生的技能,想要重现开始生活,心有余力不足,这种情况下,给他们提供工作技能培训更加可取。 
 
  尾段: 
 
  我认为:针对不同的犯罪分子,固定刑罚不是最佳的策略,我们应该考虑到犯罪者的动机和具体场景,因此,对于少年犯和成年犯罪者采取相同的处罚策略并不可取,对于青少年犯提供教育和工作的机会也许是更好的选择。
 
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  句型参考: 
 
  1. Alarmingly, the rate of juvenile delinquency,in some counties, keeps on soaring in recent years, which not only harms the sufferers but also endangers the security of the society. 令人担忧的是,青少年犯罪率近年来居高不下,这不仅仅给受害者带来了痛苦,也威胁到了社会的安定。 
 
  解析:endanger v危及到…… 
 
  2. some people argue that = an opinion springs up that …… 有人认为…… 
 
  3. My stand,however,is that …… 然而,我的立场是…… 
 
  4. primarily = for a start = first of all 第一 
 
  5. also = further = in addition 第二 
 
  6. last = eventually = to make my final point 第三 
 
  7. in other words = more precisely = by that I mean 换言之 
 
  8. indeed, I have to concede that …… = admittedly, I have to confess that …… 的确,我承认…… 
 
  9. Nonetheless, it is rather superficial to simply believe that …… 然而,简单认为……相当肤浅 
 
  拓展:nevertheless = nonetheless = however = notwithstanding all that 然而 
 
  10. in closing,I re-affirm my stand that …… 总之,我重申我的立场 
 
  词汇参考: 
 
  1. young criminals = teenage law-breakers n少年犯 
 
  2. adult perpetrators = adult offenders n成年犯罪者 
 
  3. youth crime = teenage crime = juvenile delinquency n青少年犯罪 
 
  4. poison one’s innocent mind v毒害心灵 
 
  5. arouse one’s violent impulse v诱发暴力冲动 
 
  6. mislead one’s life outlook v误导人生观 
 
  7. minimize the number of crimes committed v减少犯罪的数量 
 
  解析:crimes committed n 罪行 
 
  8. establish and ensure justice the law v 建立和确保法律的公正 
 
  9. embark on the criminal road v走上犯罪道路 
 
  10. turn to a life of crime v开始罪恶的人生 
 
  11. conduct some anti-social offences v 做出了很多的反社会的行为 
 
  12. reform criminals = reclaim law-breakers v改造犯罪分子 
 
  13. …… endanger the stability of the society and harm many victims ……危及到社会的稳定以及伤害了许多的受害者 
 
  14. …… has a deterrent role to play in …… v ……在…… 方面可以发挥一种威慑的作用 
 
  拓展:…… can stop sb from doing sth v ……可以阻止某人做…… 
 
  15. provide sb with custom-tailored ways of reclamation v给某人提供量体裁衣(因人而异)的改造方式。 
 
  解析:custom-tailored adj 因人而异的 
 
    例句参考: 
 
  1. Youth crime can take a variety of forms,from school bullying to street violence or sex assault. 青少年犯罪的形式多样,从校园欺凌到街头暴力,或者是性侵犯。 
 
  解析:a variety of adj 各种各样的 
 
  2. The same penalty should not be imposed on juvenile law-breakers and adult criminals,even though young perpetrators should be accountable for their anti-social offences. 少年犯不应该和成年犯受到完全相同的处罚,尽管少年犯也应该为自己的行为负责。 
 
  解析:be accountable for …… v对于……负责 
 
  3. Heavier penalty might make those who are led astray feel depressed or hopeless. 严重的处罚力度会使那些被引入歧途者感到沮丧或者绝望。 
 
  4. It is extremely hard for released young prisoners to earn a decent living, especially when they lack the basic working skills or survival abilities. 对于青少年刑满释放人员而言,体面地谋生很艰难,尤其是当他们缺乏基本的工作技能以及生存能力的时候。 
 
  5. Job training is for teenage prisoners who embarked on the criminal road impulsively is worthwhile. 对于因为冲动走上犯罪道路的少年犯而言,工作培训是有价值的。 
 
  6. Those who are set free are less likely to led into recommit crime and more likely to turn over a new life. 刑满释放者不容易再次犯罪,更加可能改过自新。 
 
  解析:turn over a new life v改过自新 
 
  7. As for some teenage criminals or those who are led astray, they may, in most cases, have few opportunities to receive fine education and thus own poor law-abiding awareness. 对于一些少年犯或者过失犯罪者而言,他们也许在大多情况下没有机会接受良好的教育,因此缺乏良好守法意识。 
 
  解析:law-abiding awareness n 守法意识 
 
  8. Therefore,another key strategy is to provide young prisoners with educational opportunities,which could helps those who are still in the formative years to reflect on oneself and make a clear distinction between right and wrong. 因此,另外一个关键的策略就是给青少年服刑者提供教育的机会,这可以帮助那些依然在成长中的年轻人自我反思,明辨是非。 
 
  解析:those who are still in the formative years n 依然在成长中的年轻人 
 
  解析:make a clear distinction between right and wrong v 明辨是非 
 
  9. What sanctions will be employed should take the circumstances of a crime and its motivation into account. 采取何种处罚措施应该考虑到犯罪的情形和动机。 
 
  拓展:sanctions = punishment = penalty n 处罚 
 
  解析:employ v 使用 
 
  解析:take …… into account 考虑…… 
 
  10. Fixing punishments for young criminals and adult offenders is a hasty approach对于少年犯和成年犯固定刑罚是轻率的做法。 
 
  解析:…… is a hasty approach ……是一种轻率的做法 
 
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