【范文】TPO 34独立写作解析

TPO 34独立写作题目：
　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
　　Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
　　Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

思路：同意
　　(1) 过渡依赖虚拟世界让孩子变的孤僻，不和家人朋友接触，无法适应现实社会。
　　(2) 沉溺于网络游戏让学生放弃其他兴趣，对身体健康有害。
　　(3) 社交网站让孩子学到很多不应当学得东西。
　　(4) 教师难以让学生专心听课，影响学习成绩。
　　(5) 孩子在物质追求上易形成攀比，增大父母的开销。

不同意：
　　(1) 在学习方面，学生能够可以通过高科技学习到更多的信息，并且学得更快。
　　(2) 情感上，父母可以有更多途径和孩子有共同话题，接触孩子内心世界，方便深入了解。
　　(3) 日常生活上，父母能够保证孩子在外出行安全，教会孩子利用高科技保护自己。
　　(4) 个人成长方面，孩子可以通过网络释放学习压力，缓解不良情绪。

学生作文范例（原稿）
　　It is universally acknowledge that various technologies such as cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site play a more important role on education. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that nowadays it is more difficult to educate children than in the past because children can take advantage of those high-technologies to enhance their study.
　　First and foremost, compared to the past, at present the cell phone can create a good effect on children’s study. For instance, in the past, children learned the new words by the text book without audio format, which led to the children couldn’t speak the words with correct pronunciations; while today, children can study those new words by the cell phone and they can imitate the native speaker’s voice through the audio format in the cell phone. As a result, more and more children can speak English fluently. From this fact, we can learn that the cell phone makes educating children much easier than before.

Furthermore, teaching children is easier than before by the way of playing online games which can cultivate children’s ability of cooperation. Take for example, children had few opportunities to practice the ability of cooperation before. Nevertheless, it is much easier today. In an online game, children are assigned to different tasks, only they cooperate well, can they get final success. From this experience, children can have a sense of teamwork, which cannot learn from the class. This example tells us in the modern society, children have kinds of chances to practice their cooperation’s ability, which is better for their education.

Finally, contract to the past, today social networking can expend children’s horizon, which is also beneficial for their education. For example, ten years ago, with limited technology, only travel can children learn different cultures and languages, however, it spent more money and more time; what’s more, children were too young to go for a trip by themselves. So it was not easy to come true. But today, children just need to sit in front of the computer and type some key words through Google, and then they can get plenty of information as they want immediately. Children can learn other countries’ culture and languages by watching the video online. Consequently, we can realize that social network Web site is a useful way to educate children.

In a nutshell, I strongly disagree with the statement. With the advanced technology like cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site, it can facilitate children’s education and help them be successful easier in their future.

修改稿：
　　It is universally acknowledged that various technologies such as cell phone, online games, and social networking Web sites play a more important role on in education than before. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that nowadays it is more difficult to educate children than in the past because children can take advantage of those high-technologies to enhance their study.

First and foremost, compared to in the past, at present the cell phone can is enabled to create a good positive effect on children’s study. (观点清晰)需要补充1-2句论据 Thanks to various of advanced software on the cell phone, student find it not difficult to grasp the most scientific leaning methods. For instance, in the past, children learned the new words by the text book without audio format, which led to the children couldn’t speak the words with correct pronunciations children’s false pronunciations or even mute English ; while today, children can are allowed to study those new words by the cell phone and they can imitate the native speaker’s voice through the audio format in the cell phone. As a result, more and more children can speak English fluently.(举例恰当) From this fact, we can learn that the cell phone makes educating children much easier and comprehensive than before.

Furthermore, teaching children is easier than before by the way of the obvious benefit that playing online games which can cultivate children’s ability of cooperation cannot be ignored. (观点清晰) 需要补充1-2句论据Through competing and interacting with others in the online games which can be called as a miniature of society, children can experience a sense of cooperation and responsibility intangibly. For example, due to the limitation of real situation, children had few opportunities to practice the ability of cooperation before. Nevertheless, it is much easier today, since in an online game, children are assigned to different tasks. Only when they cooperate well, can they get final success.(举例恰当，欠详细) From this experience, children can have a sense of teamwork, which cannot be learned from the class. This example tells us Obviously，in the modern society, children have kinds of chances to practice their cooperation’s ability as a result of internet , which is better for their education.

Finally, contract to the past, today social networking can expend children’s horizon, which is also beneficial for their education.(观点清晰)various information filling in the web provides children with more broaden world without stepping outside. 需要补充1-2句论据For example, ten years ago, with limited technology, only through travel can children learn different cultures and languages. However, it spent cost more money and more time; what’s more, children were too young to go for a trip by themselves. So it was not easy to come true. But today, children just need to sit in front of the computer and type some key words through Google, and then they can get plenty of information as they want immediately. (例子选的好)In addition, Children can learn other countries’ culture and languages by watching the video online. Consequently, we can realize that social network Web site is a useful way to educate children. (论述清晰,分析很好)

In a nutshell, I strongly disagree with the statement. With the advanced technology like cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site it can facilitate children’s education and help them be successful easier more easily in their future.(扣题严谨)

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