2015年10月24日雅思大作文解析

审题：
　　Some People think playing computer games is bad for children on everything? Others think it has some Positive impacts on the way children develop. What is your opinion？

这篇雅思大作文题目难度并不大，关于computer games的话题，大部分学生都是有话可讲的，因此我们可以比较容易找到切入点。在审完题之后，我们需要确定自己的总观点，那么对于前面一种人的观点：playing computer games is bad for children on everything显得过于绝对。相比较而言，第二种观点it has some Positive impacts on the way children develop显得相对比较客观，因此建议选择后者更利于我们的写作。因为写作文的原则应该是选择好写的，而不是想写的。

文章结构：
　　第一段是开头段，如果同学们自己有去看一些雅思考官给出的雅思作文范文，大家就会发现开头段只需要两句话：第一句针对题目进行改写，第二句亮明自己的观点。
　　第二三两段是主体段，第二段先写playing computer games带来的一些negative effects，第三段写computer games带来的一些positive influences.两个主体段分别从两个点去展开，从两个方面去展开比较容易把文章的词数写满，比如negative effects大家可以分别从academic performance和physical health进行展开，而positive influences大家就可以从foster children’s ability to cooperate with others和make children much more intelligent来展开。

说到展开，有的同学又会说，我不会展开，每次要展开的时候我就不知道自己能够怎样来写。其实展开是一个比较简单的过程，大家在展开的时候只需要不停地问自己为什么就可以了，我下面要讲到的问自己为什么的方法就能够帮助大家将中心句展开来。举个栗子，当我们在讲电脑游戏的negative influences的时候，针对中心句：Playing computer games may affect children’s academic performance adversely. 我们在展开的时候，只需要问问自己为什么玩游戏会影响孩子们的学习？

答案是：孩子们会沉迷游戏，花了过多时间在游戏上面。继续问自己为什么，也就是问自己孩子为什么会沉迷于游戏中呢？答案是：孩子们缺乏自控能力，并且容易被新鲜的事物所吸引。再继续问为什么，孩子们为什么缺乏自控力呢？答案也许是：孩子们年纪太小。 大家现在明白怎么去展开了吗？展开就是围绕中心句不断往前提问，然后再顺着写回来即可，那么思路也是非常清晰的。

第四段是结尾段，只需要一句话把自己的总观点再重申一下即可。

大家在写雅思大作文的时候一定要注意，文章的词汇不要为了高大上刻意去套用一些生僻的词，这样会导致文章的选词不够准确，文章读起来也会较难懂，大家应该重点放在句式的丰富多样性上面，学了各种从句大家可以下意识地把这些语法点运用起来，就比如大家喜欢用I think that…的宾语从句，其实表达相同意思你也可以选择my opinion is that的表语从句.

具体写法如下，大家可以参考：
　　People have different views about whether games exert positive influences on children’s development. While it is argued by some people that computer games only bring children negative influences, my view is that students can also benefit from playing online games.

There are two reasons why playing computer games is detrimental in some aspects. The first plain truth I am presenting here is that spending too much time on computer games may harm children’s physical health. If teenagers sit in the front of computers for too much time without working out, they may unavoidably develop some diseases, like obesity and so on. In addition to this, computer games may lead poor academic performances. Children who lack self controlling may easily be attracted by innovative things and neglect their study, and being obsessed with computer games may affect children’s study adversely.

However, the benefits brought by computer games cannot be ignored. On the one hand, computer games can develop children’s intelligence. There are many excellent computer games which are designed by game companies carefully, such as Super Mario, and these games can spark children’s imagination and develop their logical ability, which can aid students learn academic subjects faster and better. Plus, computer games can cultivate students’ ability to cooperate with others. Instead of playing computer games alone, in many games, like Dota, students need to cooperate with their peers closely, if they want to achieve the final success, and the ability to collaborate with others is extremely imperative in their future career.
 
　　To put it into a nutshell, given the sagacious reasons discussed above, we can clearly see that while playing computer games unavoidably brings some disadvantages to children, it also exert some positive impacts on children.

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