雅思写作当中段落如何展开？

雅思写作是很多同学们都在头疼的部分，词汇量、语法、文章框架结构都是难题，本期新通教育写作老师白媛为同学们分享如何展段落。

这一节， 我们主要讲解写作中间段落展开的思路。中间段落展开时我们整个课程体系中最核心的部分，也是学生问题最多的部分。今天我们就通过一篇学生的作文来讲解一下如何可以让我们中间段落的内容比较扣题。这篇作文的题目如下：

Nowadays, distance-learning programs are such a common thing for us, but some people argue that they’re not as good as those attended in a college or university by people in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

我们在这里只展示学生的中间两个段落，我们看看学生的这两段有什么内容上的问题。

It is unquestionable that the extensive use of distance-learning is beneficial to broadening your knowledge as this learning method can enable people to overcome the geographic barriers. Above all, there are many teachers who are granted as first-class teacher in distance learning programs. Compared with normal teachers, these teachers are backbones of cultivating talents and are helpful for students to improve the grades and learning ability obviously. Moreover, the students won’t be embarrassed when they ask questions for teachers. This means that scholars can share knowledge and ideas in different areas of studies. The students don’t worry about making fun of their questions because they surf the internet for studying rather than face to face.

从这个段落我们可以看出来本段的topic sentence中降到了远程教学可以帮助学生克服地理限制去获得知识。那我们本段的重点就应该房子这里，告诉我们学生有什么地理限制，造成了什么问题，有了远程教学之后，怎么帮助我们解决这个问题的。学生分了两个点去写， 但是第一部分只有好老师是怎样的，完全没有回答我们这几个问题，所以段落内容应该增添农村孩子不能享受到这么好的教师的讲课，可以有了远程教学之后，即使在农村，也可以接触到这些课程。这样我们才能把这个段落的内容交代清楚，要不然督导这里会有云里雾里的感觉。

学生还又用了另外一个点来解释，主要讲远程学生提问不会尴尬，这个其实在我们的这段的主题句中不能包含，所以要不去掉，要不稍微改动我们的主题句，加进去这部分的内容。

In addition, the dominance of distance-learning can help people have a flexible timetable according to their time. For example, these distance education courses are available 24 hours a day. When the students meet trouble, they can click the pause button and replay the video until they fully understand the content. What is more important is that students who are from rural area have the same chance to study.

而这一段内容的前半部分还不错，就是在讲解怎么更灵活的学习了。然后后半部分，也就是最后一句在讲解对于农村的孩子来说，有了一样的学习机会，这个跟本段的内容无关，跟上段的内容重复，所以可以直接删掉。

就给同学们分享到这里，如果同学们对雅思考试感兴趣，或者想通过来提升自己的英语应用能力，，我们的老师会为同学们推荐合适的成绩。

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