在雅思写作task 2 大作文中，我们的cohesion 一直是我们很多学生比较弱的部分。今天我们就来讲解一下，其实衔接第一种就是指我们平常很多学生理解的衔接词汇，比如句内很多连接词： because， as， while, unlike, even if, such as, although, in terms of 等。以及句子之间很多的连接词，比如therefore， as a result, for example, in spite of this, similarly, nevertheless, in other words 等等。我们的连接词还可以采用暗承接。我们可以使用指示代词，人称代词，物主代词或者定冠词对前一句话中出现的内容进行指代，从而在前后句之间形成自然的承接关系。比如，this trend, this development, this tendency, this experience; 或者they, these, we, such +名词等。
今天我们通过一篇学生的作文进行分析，看看如何更好地实现句子之间或者句中的衔接。作文题目是：Some think inviting large foreign companies to set up in developing countries is helpful for the local economy, while others think that they do more than goods. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.
开头：Nowadays, there are a large number of companies setting up branches and factories in developing countries. Some people think inviting large foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries is a helpful way to develop local economy. Others hold the opinion that that brings more drawbacks than benefits to developing countries.
第二段：There is no doubt that the large investment of foreign companies contributes to the development of local economy. It provides a lot of job opportunities such as building constructors, cleaners, which in turn helps the local people to generate income and improves the living standard of local people. Meanwhile, foreign investment brings new technology and management experience. People can expand their views and open their mind. The local companies can learn advanced technology and management experience so as to make it better.
我们首先看一下这篇文章的开头，在开头部分，我们总共只有3句话， 可是作者把引进外国企业到发展中国家说了两次，“a large number of companies setting up branches and factories in developing countries”and “inviting large foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries”。 这个就造成我们的语义重复。正确的应该是把最后的这个改成代词加名词的形式来代替前面出现过的这个表达，比如，我们可以用this trend, or this policy. 这样才可以避免同样的事情说两遍，避免重复。
中间段落也是一样的问题。作者在展开的时候，首先提到‘foreign investment brings new technology and management experience’。在后面的时候作者又提到‘The local companies can learn advanced technology and management experience’。这里先进的技术和管理经验就被重复了两边，其实我们在这里可以选择用代词来替换它，比如，these。所以我们改完之后，就可以变成下面的段落：
开头：Nowadays, there are a large number of companies setting up branches and factories in developing countries. Some people think this trend is a helpful way to develop local economy. Others hold the opinion that that brings more drawbacks than benefits to developing countries.
第二段：There is no doubt that the large investment of foreign companies contributes to the development of local economy. It provides a lot of job opportunities such as building constructors, cleaners, which in turn helps the local people to generate income and improves the living standard of local people. Meanwhile, the local companies can learn advanced technology and management experiences brought by these firms and open their mind, making them better.
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